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22 September 2019 @ 10:58 am
_Marooned_ edits  
I've added a bit to the fight and more resolution and more Old Gods to the last chapter.

(Anonymous) on September 22nd, 2019 07:35 pm (UTC)
I liked it. It even gives you room for a non-Xen/Rael story if you want to write about Nicholas, Wolf, Rustle, etc. exploring the Multiverse.

(Anonymous) on September 22nd, 2019 10:37 pm (UTC)
Just found another confusion - Xen comes back in chapter 22, and *says* he's going to sleep in a fast room, but doesn't seem to actually do it? isn't he about to fall on his face?

(Anonymous) on September 23rd, 2019 12:09 am (UTC)
sorry, you put it in another place. But if you do any more editing, you might think about even more evidence of falling asleep, before the meeting ends.