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21 March 2019 @ 08:38 am
_Not Fallen_ part 8 or so  

I'll assume you've all gone back and read the last time I posted the story.

And the bit I've added, which needs major expansion . . .


The Ambassador and the Bishop each sent reports home with gofers, and received in return truckloads of panels, ready for assembly. In five days they'd moved to temporary quarters on their half-mile-square piece of home.

And quickly offended several other polities.

The Bishop's virulent anti-magic stance earned them a fair amount of enmity. Despite Father Leonard attempting to point out that the problem is the use of magic in crime and sin, not the magic in and of itself.

Both of the One Worlds forbade them entrance, claiming that their preaching to the masses would incite rebellion against the One, with the original One World additionally forbidding their colonies to admit them to foment heresy and hatred of magic and magic users. Names were called, legal action was threatened.

A shouting match between the Purple Ambassador and Father Leonard starts to descend into a physical confrontation when standers-by intervened.

Ambassador Amin tried to have Bishop James Hatterus recalled.

The Bishop reciprocated.

“Old Gods! I swear I’m never inviting another Comet Fall split to come talk to us!” Xen clutched his head.

Lon snorted. “Well, they haven’t invaded anyone.”

“Yet.” Xen sat back. “Yes, you’re right. He’s nothing compared to the Helios. But that man is not living up to the tenants of his faith.”

The door to the conference room slammed open. Bishop Hatterus stalked in. “The Arbolian Ambassador had his guards lay hands on me!” He frowned down at Hackathorn.

Lon sighed. “In or out of their embassy?”

“In. I was preaching to their downtrodden staff, the lowest of the low who deserve Our support!”

“Nothing we can do, inside an embassy, Bishop. You might consider a softer approach . . .” He stopped at the glare.

Xen frowned at him. “If you feel contact with us is dangerous to your people, you can depart. We can close the gate here, and leave you the two Empty Worlds your World is now connected to.”

“Never! You’re nothing but a pack of Heathens! Damned and cursed, all of you! If I am called to cleanse the multitude of worlds, I will!” He turned and stomped out.

Xen groaned. “I’ve never expelled a world. But I’m tempted. Oh how I am tempted.”

“It may come to a vote or somesuch. Goor grief.” Lon shook his head. “Any other business?”

Two Earth splits that had a low level of genetic engineering, and rarely, someone with actual magical ability were arguing internally about the matter, with both pro- and anti-magic factions both wishing the Not Fallen Church had resisted stirring things up.

Earth Prime’s Ambassador Montgomery was gleefully supportive of the “Not Fallen” but even Arrival’s resident priest was disturbed by the aroused passions and enmity floating around the small city and begged Bishop Hatterus to be a supported of peace rather than controversy. And was shown the door.

Captain Collier received more guards to beef up the Bishop’s security, as well as the other members of both the religious and secular staff.

Miles followed the Bishop now and then, but wasn’t part of his expanded guard.

So he wasn’t on duty at the party in the Earth Embassy when the Bishop fell, or was pushed, from the roof.


“. . . and I demand a full investigation.” Father Leonardo was cold and dignified.

If not for the red eyes, I’d think him unbothered by the loss of his bishop.

Miles eyed the packed assembly room.

“And not a single magically talented person on the investigating team! May God bless and guide this investigation.” Father Leonardo nodded firmly and stepped away from the podium.

Lon Hackathorn pinched the bridge of his nose, and took over. “Ambassador Montgomery, let’s talk about whether Disco investigates, or whether your people investigate with an observer from Not Fallen, and an observer from Disco.”

Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 21st, 2019 03:14 pm (UTC)

and BTW == tenants of his faith=

++ tenets of his faith++
matapampamuphoff on March 21st, 2019 03:41 pm (UTC)
Thank you, I knew it looked wrong, but didn't hunt down where I went wrong.
ekuah on March 21st, 2019 03:21 pm (UTC)
About Not Fallen Part 1-7
I don't know when Not Fallen will take place, but if it takes place somewhen after 'A Prophetable Enterprise' it is odd that there is no single mentioning of Ra'd, Nighthawk, Paer, Rael, Arno, Ryol or Xen's kids. Some of the 'Embassy' vibe is missing. (Imho it feels somewhat not completely canon)

Certainly you could place it somewhen earlier, but that could easily cause confusion to new readers. (I think your publications where more or less in a chronological order)

Edited at 2019-03-21 03:22 pm (UTC)
matapampamuphoff on March 21st, 2019 03:39 pm (UTC)
Re: About Not Fallen Part 1-7
This will be part of the collection. It'll happen prior to _Children of a Foreign God_.

Who shows up where will mostly depend on how much I expand on the Bishop's problems with everyone, either above, or as part of the investigation. I really don't want this blowing up in size.
matapampamuphoff on March 21st, 2019 03:50 pm (UTC)
Re: About Not Fallen Part 1-7
I probably ought to figure out who killed him. It would make the investigation a bit less chaotic.
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(Anonymous) on March 21st, 2019 09:41 pm (UTC)
He horses did it.
matapampamuphoff on March 21st, 2019 09:49 pm (UTC)
Hmm . . . Pyrite could get up there, but could he be unnoticed at the party?
ekuah on March 21st, 2019 11:56 pm (UTC)
Well first I thought Pyrite could teleport behind him and startle him with a mental 'Boo'.
But then I remembered that the Bishop is most likely thought-deaf...
mbarkermbarker on March 22nd, 2019 01:22 am (UTC)
Y'a know, it's about time for a flying horse... NEIGH!
(no subject) - pamuphoff on March 22nd, 2019 02:53 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - mbarker on March 22nd, 2019 06:38 am (UTC) (Expand)
(Anonymous) on March 22nd, 2019 12:46 am (UTC)
Pyrite and Dunn in a compass should be able to push him from a distance. Especially if Bishop upsets someone defenseless they love. Hm. He might want to slaughter a telepathic foal that he can hear.
ekuah on March 22nd, 2019 12:10 pm (UTC)
Well you usually need four for a compass.
So maybe Jet and Phantom should participate too.
mbarker: Me typing?mbarker on March 22nd, 2019 01:23 pm (UTC)
Oh, let’s get a couple of goats in the mix!
(Anonymous) on March 22nd, 2019 03:02 pm (UTC)
And bunnies.
(Anonymous) on March 23rd, 2019 12:47 am (UTC)
By the time of Children the Embassy herd contains God-horses who have enough of the genes to telepathically communicate with anyone who can "heaar" their frequency.

Horses grow up faster, it's entirely plausible theres enough of those horse around, younger but old enough to have "touched power" to form a compass with Pyrite, maybe even a "major compass" (I don't know much about herd dynamics, but if younger stallions have been subjected to hormone suppression spells, maybe they're still acceptable enough as "colts" to the herd hierarchy to be allowed to hang around longer than usual? Not to mention the God-horses may just be able reason their way around any instinct to drive out excess males).
matapampamuphoff on March 23rd, 2019 01:21 am (UTC)
The majority of the stallions use the testosterone suppression spells so they get along better with each other. Or as Pyrite puts it, they stop acting "stallion stupid."