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18 January 2019 @ 04:59 pm
_Lucky Dave_ editing  
  Take a quick look at a short bit I changed:

Rael grinned back . . . then sobered. "At a ten thousand-to-one time dilation . . . umm."

"Fourteen centuries since the Arrival . . . in a bubble the time dilation would cut that to a bit less than two months." Ryol paused. "Call it fifty days, because it isn't exactly ten thousand-to-one anyway. And the Fall of Rangpur was in the year 265 . . . But if they didn't come out in, um, forty days . . . Anyone in there's probably dead . . . eww. Skeletons."
 
 
 
mbarker: Me typing?mbarker on January 19th, 2019 01:03 am (UTC)
Maybe Arno could innocently remark to Xen on the different kinds of bubbles... you know, the ones with spots, ripples... and the time dilation changes that go with that? Oh, actually, there’s already canon about them being able to shift the time dilation, and with a prophet and lucky inside praying they have a little more time... I’ll bet the time dilation could shift? Giving Q something new to study.
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on January 19th, 2019 01:25 am (UTC)
I would suggest.

++ "Starting with the Arrival that's fourteen centuries . . . in a bubble the time dilation would cut that to a bit less than two months." Ryol paused. "Call it fifty days, because it isn't exactly ten thousand-to-one anyway.
But the Fall of Rangpur was in the year 265 . . . And if they didn't come out in, um, forty days . . . Anyone in there's probably dead . . . eww. Skeletons.