matapam (pamuphoff) wrote,

_Lucky Dave_ editing

  Take a quick look at a short bit I changed:

Rael grinned back . . . then sobered. "At a ten thousand-to-one time dilation . . . umm."

"Fourteen centuries since the Arrival . . . in a bubble the time dilation would cut that to a bit less than two months." Ryol paused. "Call it fifty days, because it isn't exactly ten thousand-to-one anyway. And the Fall of Rangpur was in the year 265 . . . But if they didn't come out in, um, forty days . . . Anyone in there's probably dead . . . eww. Skeletons."

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