matapam (pamuphoff) wrote,
matapam
pamuphoff

_Scrambled_

Approaches completion.

I need to have pointed out to me gaps and holes and inconsistencies and especially scenes that need more.

The main things you guys haven't seen are Ebsa & Co aiding Disco with the rescue of the people scattered about.

So, do I need to write out the details of the whole Water World rescue? Do I need to show the Dino World rescue?

Anything else?

Remember that this is before _Children of a Foreign God_.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aDP4vhz6olxRxwsDNkueSEpogTknpz0VnRUHt-U384E/edit?usp=sharing

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