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30 July 2018 @ 03:35 pm
_External Relations_  
Pretty much final, if any of you need a file to read on a big screen or whatever.

Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on July 31st, 2018 01:46 am (UTC)
Um, Chapter 14 *Mushy and Whipper* on CF doesn't do much and could be just reported later. Eliminate?
matapampamuphoff on July 31st, 2018 03:18 am (UTC)
No, that's how they got the Wine, that they used at the party, that got four of the conspirators getting cold feet and so forth.

Beside, I need Mushy and Whipper "the Comet Fall experts" for _Gods and Princesses_.
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on July 31st, 2018 01:54 am (UTC)
Perhaps it should be clarified that both Jack and Arrow have their advanced and very large payments stashed on at least three worlds?

They haven't done anything against CF law.

Magical Engineers on Earth BE?
matapampamuphoff on July 31st, 2018 03:40 am (UTC)
Nope. Jack's barely showing a profit, hence his vulnerability to the Oner's offer of money. In fact, that's what I ought to add in. The generous fee for recruiting a gate maker being all that got him through a tough patch with only a couple of late payments on the newest of his company vehicles.

And "You know, I was just about to see if Governor Arry would actually cough up some Earth or Comet Fall currency and pay us . . . Oh well. I suspect the government is dissecting my finances and seizing assets. Gold would have been nice though."
(Anonymous) on July 31st, 2018 03:25 am (UTC)
It gets better with every iteration, and is definitely much cleaner, but I did find a few minor items about which I made comments made in document.

matapampamuphoff on July 31st, 2018 04:10 am (UTC)
Amazing, isn't it? Every time you look, there are these things you just didn't see the last two (or more) times . . . At some point, you say, "good enough" and push the button.