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24 May 2018 @ 11:12 am
_Marooned_ the end  
Okay, the brain's not cooperating on filling in a few scenes inbetween, so you're getting the outline of them and the end. I need to get back to work on _External Relations_ .


“Interesting? I was puking sick before we made it half-way.” She kicked him when he laughed.

“Well, I suppose it’s less disorienting when you can see the inbetween and such, even if I can’t actually see through the gates.”

A snort from the horse. :: I just refuse to see the energy, so I can see the other side. ::

Xen sat up and eyed the horse.

:: I told Q. You do it so faster and easier, I never bothered to make gates. ::

Rael started snickering.

Xen climbed back to his feet and loosened Pyrite’s cinch. “C’mon, let’s get back to the village. I want to talk to everyone.”



(1)   Renshe to Embassy

(2) Han Guards decide to stay on Wolf World, wistfully ask Xen, if the opportunity comes up, to ask their (now ex—and possible reassigned) wives and children to join them. Sketch out the underground facilities, and where to find the living quarters.

(3) Set a gate to Xin Zhongguo, and set up a spy post in the woods around the bowl of the dimensional apparatus.

(4) Things to add into earlier parts—the Han spies. One or two, hanging about with the media types, camping in a solar electric vehicle on the beach, occasionally disappearing into the maze. Connor and Jerry recognize him . . . and finally tell Lon.

(5)

(a) New carpet visit with yet a third Judge.

(b) Xen & Q watching for the gate from Xin Zhongguo, checking to make sure it stays small. Wolf and Rustle on Embassy to help?

(c)   Connor and Jerry jump on carpet. “We have information we need to give to AnnaKarina.” Zap, zap. Mike steps on. Zap. Poof, they’re gone.

(d) Xen, standing invisibly by the controls, follows AK and Jaejong out to where the minimally zapped trio are regaining consciousness.

(e) Climactic scene:

“So . . . Transported criminals. Returning.” Jaejong started gathering power, advanced on the trio.

Jerry choked out “Semofazing in the vaccines. That’s why none of your descendants

have power, and why they miscarry.”

“What!” AnnaKarina strode forward, and Jaejong glared back at her.

“He’s lying. Trying to come back . . .” His head snapped back around and he frowned at Jerry. “Foreign clothing. So you’ve thrown in with the World Killers.”

Jerry climbed to his feet and stumbled around the man and closer to AK. “Look at me.” He dropped his shields and glowed.

Connor staggered up beside him. “Me too. We’ve been poisoned with a low dose of the Death of Magic, probably since we were teenagers.”

Jaejong pulled power, glowing as he advanced.

AK pulled the young men forward and past her to either side. “Don’t touch them.”

Jaejong sneered. “I’m so tired of treating a woman like an equal. I can do . . .”

A dull thud. Jaejong collapsed forward, limp.

Mike stood behind him. Club coming up again. “You killed my baby.” A full strength two handed swing. Blood flew as lightning crackled, threw him back. A psychic shock, a crackling invisible hurricane of death energy swept outward.

A long moment of silence.

The judge staggered forward, stopped and stared down at the crushed mess. The guards stepped closer, hands going to their heads.

AnnaKarina stepped back, hands to her face, tears starting.

Xen stepped invisibly closer. Jaegong was dead . . . and Mike Watson was dying, his heart stopped . . . He swooped a bubble over the man, then grabbed another and double it.

He stepped quietly back as a crowd rushed in, guards and techs from below.

I hope some people stayed at the controls. And I think I’ll leave now. I can drop some block eaters in the water supplies, and check the vaccine makers . . . no. I think I can leave that in AK’s hands. She can decide whether to continue Jaejong’s horrific program of magic control, or let it go.

He teleported out.



Epilog

“ . . . so just give yourself time to heal before exerting yourself.”

Xen grinned at Lady Gisele’s worried fussing, and grabbed the bag that held Mike’s few personal possessions. “Don’t worry. Between Cali and Killerbite, Mike’s not going to be allowed to lift a finger. Probably for months.”

Mike sighed. “I don’t deserve this. I murdered him.”

Xen shrugged. “Jaejong comes under the heading of ‘needed killing’ and, well, you had personal cause to do it. Jerry and Connor have been cleared of collusion, but they sentenced them to be Transported. That happened yesterday. Q found them and took them back to the village.”

“Oh . . . I didn’t think . . . they acted alone, you know, to tell AnnaKarina about the vaccines. They didn’t know what I was planning.” Mike hung his head. “What about . . . Poobah and the guards?”

“Poobah and two other judges are in a retirement home on the One World. They have staff who can deal with magical people who have dementia. The guards have recovered entirely, and their wives and children have joined them on Wolf World.”

Lady Gisele glowered. “You kidnapped them.”

“Did not. I offered and they jumped for it. Just because I didn’t get permission from the government doesn’t make it kidnapping.”

“The diplomacy is complicated enough . . .” She shook her head and faded into the Old Crone, the better to glare at him.

Mike swallowed. “I would like . . . will I be allowed to go back to the village?”

“Yes. But first you have to recover. Your heart isn’t up to carrying firewood. Yet. But the winter there has been mild so far, and you’ll be good to go in the spring.”



 
 
 
matapampamuphoff on May 24th, 2018 04:13 pm (UTC)
Mind you, when I pull it out in six months I may change quite a lot of it.
(Anonymous) on May 24th, 2018 04:36 pm (UTC)
Oh, I like Mike.

So Leo next?

(Yeah, yeah, apparently when it comes to Heros, I have a Type.)

Holly
mbarkermbarker on May 25th, 2018 01:21 am (UTC)
While I think that was supposed to be a warning, I feel more like it is a promise! I mean, I look forward to the changes! Yay!
ekuah on May 24th, 2018 04:54 pm (UTC)
I'm sorry to say it...
...but I'm a bit nonplussed about you letting them kill Jaegong.

It seems a little bit out of character for Xen to stand idle when Mike murders him.
Xen has left worse people live.

Also Jaegong could be a useful story tool to let Disco learn about the Drei Mächte Bündniss. (to my knowledge Jaegong ist an DMB expat)

A chain spell and a transformation into a despised kind of animal (a toothless and spayed stinking old dog maybe?) should be enough punishment for him for now.
It would also save this character for your further story usage.

Edited at 2018-05-24 04:58 pm (UTC)
(Anonymous) on May 24th, 2018 06:47 pm (UTC)
Re: I'm sorry to say it...
Jaejong is neither an innocent nor someone anybody would want to do business with in the future. He has more blood on his hands than Hitler, Mao, Stalin, and Pol Pot combined. I see no good reason not to let another resident of the plant take care of the problem.

It solves the problem of bickering throughout the Multiverse about what to do with Jaejong, and Disco can more or less dodge blame for it happening. It may simplify matters somewhat, just as the scuttling of the German High Seas Fleet at Scapa Flow eliminated Allied bickering over division of the spoils.

--TheOtherSean
(Anonymous) on May 25th, 2018 01:01 am (UTC)
RE: I'm sorry to say it...
Could be personal for Xen too. They did his Daddy wrong, along with all his tellie friends.
matapampamuphoff on May 25th, 2018 01:09 am (UTC)
Re: I'm sorry to say it...
Or it could be that, just like everyone else there, Xen was glued to the Jaejong-AK confrontation, and barely noticed Mike before the first blow fell.

Edited at 2018-05-25 01:10 am (UTC)
(Anonymous) on May 24th, 2018 05:58 pm (UTC)
Vaccines
How can AK not know about the vaccines? They have been in use for around a hundred years and the changes at puberty when the poisoning starts are very noticeable especially as she would be familiar with her people from their previous world and stupidity (not foolishness) setting in a puberty would not have happened there.
matapampamuphoff on May 24th, 2018 07:04 pm (UTC)
Re: Vaccines
The annual shots are personalized. Probably only a few thousand people out of a population of fifty million had the genetic potential to be either an asset or a threat to Jaejong. The ones he had no use for got an annual micro dose of semofazing.

She comes from a world with annual flu shots, regular doctor checkups. She was probably relieved that they'd made it to a civilized world.

After over a thousand years of her four daughters marrying into the (mostly) non-engineered Eden Colonists, and their daughters (since there were no sons, the inbreeding--even if they'd wanted to--couldn't start until the half of the grandaughters with no power had sons) . . . the occasional girl with both the witch power gene and enough insertions to do something with them had become quite rare. A few Eden boys might have had the mage gene, but minimal other changes.

Once dropped into contact with Jaejong's family more magical children would have been born, but Jaejong was already keeping control over potential rivals and only allowed a few women, now and then to grab that power. A few teenagers sloughing off and their grades dropping? That's nothing new.

So Sam and Mike, for whatever reason, were allowed to develop their magic. Jerry and Connor weren't. Mike's Ex-wife wasn't.
matapampamuphoff on May 24th, 2018 07:18 pm (UTC)
Re: Vaccines
Additionally, some of AK descendants, like Jerry and Connor, were transported on flimsy ground and _not_ given an implant. The semofazing would have aged off over a year. So AK may be getting her relatives away from Jaejong, whenever possible.
matapampamuphoff on May 25th, 2018 01:37 am (UTC)
So, anyone have any opinions on whether I should add more to the start?

I was thinking a prologue from the POV of a spy from Xin Zhongguo watching while the incredibly powerful World Killer steps onto the carpet . . .
(Anonymous) on May 25th, 2018 02:42 am (UTC)
Personally, I rather like the cold open you have. If you are planning to introduce the spies into the story, though, a scene from their perspective of watching Xen and confront the Judge, then disappear might be nice. But after the entire scene plays out from Xen's perspective, please.

--TheOtherSean
mbarkermbarker on May 25th, 2018 07:05 am (UTC)
Hum... if you want to beef up the story a bit, telling us more about their society might work. Actually, you could lace in someone listening to the news reports, including the announcements that our heroic leaders have decided that they must step in to stop these world killers before they destroy more innocent planets... or something like that? I mean, I suspect that Xin Zhongguo may very well have a strong propagan... er, information and news system, dedicated to showing that the government is taking care of you!