matapam (pamuphoff) wrote,
matapam
pamuphoff

Problems

This story is lacking them.

No conflicts to speak of.

So . . . That's going to have to be the Ministry of War, not Transportation. It's going to have a bunch-a-ton of Ministry Guards and maybe an army officer or three marooned here.

Those Earth soldiers that Ebsa and Nick fought, wound up here as well. They're feeling a bit grudgy.

Nick has the bad combo of rape genes. As he speeds through puberty, he's going to discover some all new demons inside, and is going to have to deal with them.

Not too much rewriting at the Ministry. Mainly need to add the Earth soldiers to the mix.

Okay. That'll keep me out of trouble tomorrow.
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