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01 April 2016 @ 05:40 pm
_Goat Wizards_  
Is now a google.doc. Tell me what you think. What I took too much out of, what is still too icky (Yes, I know you'll all disagree, but I need a bunch of opinions) Oh, and typo hunt if you feel like it. I have to go ponder covers.
matapampamuphoff on April 2nd, 2016 01:10 pm (UTC)
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on April 2nd, 2016 10:57 pm (UTC)
On the line edit angle I wanted to ask about 'disbursed'. You sometimes have this where dispersed is the right word but also use it with (magical) power where you may mean either "get rid of" where dispersed is fine but also "use effectively" where it becomes a Technical Term.


Some other word since disburse is a bit "bring reader to a halt" ?

Little Egret in Walton-on-Thames
matapampamuphoff on April 3rd, 2016 04:42 am (UTC)
Right. I'll hunt them down and figure it out.
hollybambolo on April 3rd, 2016 03:10 am (UTC)
Selano's visit to Ash happens after where Juli talks about the magewives all being pregnant by a strange mage who came through a few months ago.
matapampamuphoff on April 3rd, 2016 04:34 am (UTC)
Arg! Thanks. I'll deal with it.