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20 June 2015 @ 09:51 am
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Now ready for final comments and typo/grammar hunt:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-6NaVSqZYB67VWhw5r7Oz_UuAp4jo1THxfNkM3gJmi8/edit

I hope you like it, broke one of my own rules, here.
 
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hollybambolo on June 20th, 2015 08:25 pm (UTC)
Highlights in blue for you to look at.

*sniffle* I don't cry over books, but that was a tearjerker scene. Poor Xen.
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hollybambolo on June 20th, 2015 08:35 pm (UTC)
When Xen is talking about the relative ages of the gods, isn't Chance's different, and since he's Xen's great-grandfather, Xen would know.
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matapampamuphoff on June 20th, 2015 11:49 pm (UTC)
Yes, Chance would have been in Scoone, during the post comet reign of the Tyrant Wizards. Ditto Pax. I'll expand that.
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Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on June 20th, 2015 09:10 pm (UTC)
I liked it. Better balanced that the prior version.

Perhaps you should paste in the correction instructions so as to provide a base for folk to start from instead of inventing their own ?


Little Egret in Walton-on-Thames
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matapampamuphoff on June 21st, 2015 12:06 am (UTC)
So long as it's marked, I'll find it. I've started working straight from the Google Doc, so the highlighting is actually the easiest way to find things.
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hollybambolo on June 21st, 2015 03:46 am (UTC)
Perhaps I'm wrong, but I've seen Bret say before that he uses yellow, and I figured if I named a color, then if it weren't clear what I thought I saw, it would be easy enough for you to know who it was who marked something if you wanted to ask.
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matapampamuphoff on June 21st, 2015 10:20 pm (UTC)
Oh, it's easier if you put in explicit how to <<>> but generally, once something is called to my attention, I can figure out what I did wrong.

I really appreciate the help, and whatever is easiest for you will be fine with me.
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Bretbretw on June 22nd, 2015 09:19 pm (UTC)
Was out-of-town for a bit, just got back.

How long do I have to read through it?
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matapampamuphoff on June 22nd, 2015 09:53 pm (UTC)
Two weeks at least., no sweat.
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Bretbretw on June 23rd, 2015 11:12 pm (UTC)
I think I'm done editing.

The gods who are living forever need to sleep extended periods of time every once in awhile. From Wolf in Comet Fall, it sounds like they have to do that even if they don't suffer serious injury.

So won't all of the live forever folk have to do that? If so, I'm wondering if you should consider mentioning that somewhere?
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matapampamuphoff on June 23rd, 2015 11:29 pm (UTC)
Well, they haven't found that out yet, have they? I shall have to think about how to use that interesting idea.
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Bretbretw on June 23rd, 2015 11:56 pm (UTC)
Well, I didn't think Trump would start looking younger until she went into the healing sleep. Like Wolf, who looked old when he started his sleep in Comet Fall but then looked young after the sleep.

Do all the gods follow that pattern? Gisele, for example?
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matapampamuphoff on June 24th, 2015 01:58 am (UTC)
The Gods are so controlled by the collective subconscious it's hard to say. Do they just collect micro damage until it either accumulates enough to trigger a renewal cycle, or do they tend to look like people expect them to look? The God of Eternal Youth looks like a teenager, the God of War cycles from a vigorous thirtyish to a strong sixtyish. The Traveler is rarely less than middle-aged, even when he's bashing bandits.Pax is the Golden Boy, and Gisele and Romeau morph or seem to, when the need or whim suits.

I suspect the people getting the Elixir of Long Life will also experience a wide spread of results.
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