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30 March 2016 @ 12:57 am
_Cascades_ has gone live  
Twice--as i had problems with the map.

http://www.amazon.com/Cascades-Wine-Gods-Book-24-ebook/dp/B01DL6F0C2/
 
 
 
(Anonymous) on April 8th, 2016 02:09 pm (UTC)
Continuity bugs
Thoroughly enjoyed this, even though I'd read the first two in the snippets. Better in the final :) (I do wish a bit more had been made out of Q's advancement, but perhaps that happens from her POV in an unreleased story?)

Perhaps others have already emailed you about these, and for all I know you may have fixed them between the time I downloaded the book and the time I read it, but just in case:

In Beauty and the Thief, Lizard tells Kevi that he got lost in Karista, but that's before he gets lost there. It looks like the whole paragraph about Kevi teaching them their letters got put in the wrong place (it also appears in the outtake, where it belongs).

Corridors:

At some point Xen tells someone that Magic Central knows enough about the magic school that they don't need to keep tabs on it, and then he proceeds to investigate it and learn things he didn't know...and starts disrupting things. Doesn't seem quite consistent.

The section about Xen's next orders after he visits the school is sort-of repeated twice in fairly quick succession. Looks like the second time, when Gerrit is actually speaking, is the correct one.

Xen says he's going to prepare a disruption for the magic school and deal with the ones who can open corridors, and we learn at some point that it is a group of witches...but that thread is completely dropped (unless the stuff he did while he was there was the disruption being mentioned after it happened?)

Looking forward to your next release(s)!
matapampamuphoff on April 8th, 2016 05:07 pm (UTC)
Re: Continuity bugs
Thanks! I'll fix those.

Did anyone have trouble with the map?