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25 March 2016 @ 05:42 pm
_Typo Hunting_  
OK, I've decided to do these as a collection. Tell me what you think.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1I07TevuzC06FULY4jyt0cXbrrb8I2o_vxmfSb6dzdck/edit?usp=sharing
 
 
 
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 26th, 2016 01:33 am (UTC)
Is the dog Barracuda (correct spelling for fish) or Baracuda?

Meaning in canon as released.

LE
matapampamuphoff on March 26th, 2016 02:52 am (UTC)
Barracuda, as in _Earth Gate_. Fixed it in my master copy.
(Anonymous) on March 26th, 2016 01:54 am (UTC)
ok, will do.
"wind of the gods" it's like the eighth word. Was that intentional?
matapampamuphoff on March 26th, 2016 02:47 am (UTC)
Re: ok, will do.
::Thumps head on desk:: _Wine_ of the Gods. ::Sigh:: I could use some, about now.
matapampamuphoff on March 26th, 2016 09:54 pm (UTC)
You guys are awesome.

(1)Did the additions to Corridors make Garit a better character?

(2)Is having the three stories together an improvement over encountering them separately?
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 27th, 2016 12:25 am (UTC)
I'll have to get back to you on (a)

The three do fit but the cliff-hanger on the security chief's origin somewhat stands out as /different/ from the rest.
matapampamuphoff on March 27th, 2016 04:10 am (UTC)
Mogan glowered. "I'm going to pretend I understood all of that, because I hear horses coming."
"Inky and Vinz." Yellow said, as Trip and Invisible galloped around the corner, tails wagging.
"Bah. You did understand it. Now, if there's a fourth polity exploring the dimensions we'd love to open diplomatic relations. On the other hand, if you're another agent from that Purple World working with Marty in Hastu, I think he's reestablished communications and is no longer marooned. You might want to go home quickly before Q finds Earth's new gate and destroys it."
Yellow's eyebrows rose. "Oh. Like Jaime Felis. Ha! I saw that twitch! You know him?"
"Jamie's not a Purp, he's a Power." Mogan hunched his shoulders. "And Marty blamed all his troubles on me and kicked me out."
Xen grinned. "Jaimie's with the abandoned Earthers on the east coast of Asia. He's gotten a fair amount of training at the Wizards' School. Did you debilitate your scalp because of your hair color?"
Mogan gave him an exasperated glare, but Xen was suddenly not paying attention, gazing north at fast climbing dark clouds. "That could be trouble." He vaulted onto his horse and disappeared.
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 27th, 2016 11:59 pm (UTC)
(a) Yes, I think the additional Garit material makes it work better. Maybe tighten up a bit about baldness.
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 27th, 2016 01:09 am (UTC)
As was I think agreed, you need to explain Tirdal.
matapampamuphoff on March 27th, 2016 04:12 am (UTC)
Yoderite and Tirdal were insufferably smug that they'd dodged getting pregnant this time. Actually Tirdal was amazingly chaste for a girl who'd grown up on the Mages' Island. At least she'd gotten enough early witch training that there'd been no accidents when she'd grasped power . . . and Inky wasn't at all sure that she wasn't still a virgin.
matapampamuphoff on March 27th, 2016 04:17 am (UTC)
Or perhaps just drop her, because anything further is going to involve "Daughter of a harem girl and Pax who was birded by Edmund Vice. Her mother attached herself to a couple of western mage/soldiers by the name of Oscar and Bran, and they brought her to Karista and the Mage Island before they disappeared. So the former Eunuch harem guards who'd also come along earned their living gardening for Trump and Hell and of course Trump kept an eye on the only girl child, as she ought to have the Witch X. . . "

Some day I'll need Oscar and Bran again and rescue them.

Edited at 2016-03-27 04:18 am (UTC)
Michawl DolbearMichawl Dolbear on March 28th, 2016 12:01 am (UTC)
Drop or perhaps add adopted or foster sister without more.